Orbs: IT’S A FUCKING EYE, IT IS JUST A FUCKING EYE. SAY EYE.
Other male: Is this an MxM roleplay or a BBC nature documentary because I suddenly can’t tell. Just say other man, for the love of fucking christ.
Cutely: NO NO NO NO, the adverb form of cute was a mistake, also any action performed “cutely” is an example of the worst kind of tell don’t show writing.
Huff: Just overused.
Lowly (meaning deeply or quietly): This is a weird usage and I don’t think I’ve seen it used outside of roleplay so ???
Hues used to mean eyes: HUES MEANS COLOR “Cerulean hues turned to meet green” hue does not mean eye.
Did I mention I have a blog that’s just about my roleplaying?
Thoughts From The Peacock Angel 